Can we romance/date the Hyena? What about the white and black one Rin? (Sorry I don't know if he's a tiger, a wolf or a dog, can't tell from the pictures)
Also what's up with the ultra thin necks? (Their heads are big in comparison to their necks and I find that disturbing) They should be more proportionate...
Spoilers below, please dont read if you haven't played the game.
So a bit of feedback,
It would be better if you blur the background images that aren't drawn, similar to other VNs, the humans in the images tend to interrupt immersion.
Artstyle is really cute, though Ed and Cypress's heads might be a tad small compared to their bodies. Also from what I feel and see, every characters necks seem too thin, try and thicken them a bit.
In terms of dialogue, I would say place the MC's thoughts into italics or something to indicate that they aren't being said out loud, can be confusing even if there are quotes on vocal dialogue and none on thoughts. Like :
Also for certain sections of dialogue, it gets rather close to the menu, I think limiting each section to 4 lines would be better. For instance :
In terms of grammatical fixes :-
I believe the "phew" in the sentence should be capitalized.
There are few more sentences that aren't capitalized, after the gym section.
It should be "I finally get to train someone!"
The "get" before "take an hour" shouldn't be there.
There are a few more, but they all happen after the choice of destination after the orientation.
So far that's all I've picked up, I'll update you if I find anything else, assuming you would like it.
Thank you for the feedback, I'll pass on the sprite stuff to my artist when I can! A lot of the grammatical errors I will fix so thank you for picking up on where I missed them (which might be a lot ;w;) In terms of italics and such it's mainly a case of me still trying to learn the program as I'm going through everything but it is something I've planned to do! Once again, thank you for the feedback it helps so much in making a good game!
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Is it getting updated soon?
I've been playing this VN for a while and I just noticed that I've had a dumb smile plastered on my face the whole time hahaha
Man I love this visual novel so much! I've been laughing a lot! I love it so much!
Light is super cute, I hope he will be dateable too😊
Can we romance/date the Hyena? What about the white and black one Rin? (Sorry I don't know if he's a tiger, a wolf or a dog, can't tell from the pictures)
Also what's up with the ultra thin necks? (Their heads are big in comparison to their necks and I find that disturbing) They should be more proportionate...
Will you make an android version?
I saw somewhere about a port to play Windows Reply games in Android ... https://resbach.itch.io/joiplay
As there is no means of following development, I was wondering if this VN is still being updated.
Ah yes! Sorry I completely forgot to link the twitter page, will do that asap
Sweet, thank you! ^^
Spoilers below, please dont read if you haven't played the game.
So a bit of feedback,
It would be better if you blur the background images that aren't drawn, similar to other VNs, the humans in the images tend to interrupt immersion.
Artstyle is really cute, though Ed and Cypress's heads might be a tad small compared to their bodies. Also from what I feel and see, every characters necks seem too thin, try and thicken them a bit.
In terms of dialogue, I would say place the MC's thoughts into italics or something to indicate that they aren't being said out loud, can be confusing even if there are quotes on vocal dialogue and none on thoughts. Like :
Also for certain sections of dialogue, it gets rather close to the menu, I think limiting each section to 4 lines would be better. For instance :
In terms of grammatical fixes :-
I believe the "phew" in the sentence should be capitalized.
There are few more sentences that aren't capitalized, after the gym section.
It should be "I finally get to train someone!"
The "get" before "take an hour" shouldn't be there.
There are a few more, but they all happen after the choice of destination after the orientation.
So far that's all I've picked up, I'll update you if I find anything else, assuming you would like it.
Take care!
Thank you for the feedback, I'll pass on the sprite stuff to my artist when I can! A lot of the grammatical errors I will fix so thank you for picking up on where I missed them (which might be a lot ;w;) In terms of italics and such it's mainly a case of me still trying to learn the program as I'm going through everything but it is something I've planned to do! Once again, thank you for the feedback it helps so much in making a good game!
Always happy to help!
i love this game <3